critique of suspended

Joy Harjo’s essay "suspended" is about her discovery of Jazz and how she believes it to be a form of communication that transposes linguistic and cultural borders. Despite the essay’s brevity, I was able to recognize both positive and negative aspects about her writing. I really enjoyed the middle portion of her essay where Harjo gives a vivid, sensory description of the car’s interior that ranged from her dad’s cologne to the cool breeze rushing inwards via the crack in the window. I feel this portion of her essay was fluent, appropriate, and also easy for the audience to read.
However, I felt most of her essay was confusing to read, and was too short for such a deep and broad topic. At the beginning of her essay, especially the first three or four sentences, I found myself having to go back and read what Harjo was trying to convey. When Harjo first explains her discovery of jazz, she states that it occurred before she acquired language. The subsequent sentence goes on to state that her concept of language changed because of this particular moment of discovery. This is confusing to me in that I don’t understand how one’s concept of language can change without having even acquired the ability to comprehend language. It could be that jazz was the catalyst between Harjo and her concept of language, however, I am not sure. To clear up any confusion, Harjo could have developed this idea further and conveyed it with more clarity. Another example of confusion I had with this essay is when Harjo credits Jazz to changing "the way she looked at the sun", then goes on to state how her parents overlooked things she observed but that they were still "omnipresent gods." Possibly I am being too literal, but I don’t see the relationship between the sun, her parents, and what she initially stated with jazz and language. Here, I feel Harjo could better organize her essay by keeping paragraphs focused. I feel if she worked more on focusing her ideas and practiced better organization, Harjo could possibly elborate, thus better conveying her relationship with jazz.